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THE CRAFT OF WRITING — DECEMBER 2024

 

2024 has been a special year on the Craft of Writing blog. The theme of this year’s blog posts was Aspects of the Novel, and each month I interviewed an extraordinary author on a different subject. The results were so full of writing wisdom, I decided to present a snippet from each interview in this, the last post of 2024.

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Now, sit back and enjoy walking with our wise friends through Aspects of the Novel. To see the entire interview for any of the choices below, click on the link.

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VOICE (James Scott Bell)

How does an author go about developing his/her own voice?

It’s really a matter of learning ways to let the voice run free. Let it come out naturally as you, the author, are concentrating on the emotion and action and internal lives of the characters. There are various exercises I give in my book on voice, such as the page-long sentence. When I come to a place of high emotion in a scene, I like to start a fresh document and write a single, run-on sentence of at least 200 words. It is free-form, wild text in the character’s voice, not thinking about grammar or structure. It’s just pouring out the emotion as fast and intensely as possible.

What happens inevitably, like panning for gold, is you get a few glistening nuggets. It may even be only one sentence, but that sentence will be choice.

There are other methods, but the great point is that doing this begins to develop a strong “voice muscle” in your writer’s brain, and you get better and better at it the more you exercise it.

 

PLOTTING (DiAnn Mills)

What makes a good plot? Do you advise authors to write to specific plot points (e.g., inciting incident, first pinch point, dark night of the soul)?

This depends on the type of plotter and the method the writer’s brain functions. I’d like to emphasize that the writer must work according to how their brain processes and analyzes story. With that said, I write toward:

  1. The first open doorway which is 1/5 to ¼ of the way into the novel. This is where the POV character determines to go after the goal.
  2. Mid-point, I toss in a wrench. In other words, something about the plot changes the story.
  3. End of middle, the climax.
  4. Resolution

 

ANTAGONISTS (Debbie Burke)

How does a good writer approach creating the antagonist character? Are there exercises a writer can use to develop their villain-creating talents?

A technique I like to use is James Scott Bell’s voice journal. Let the antagonist write out their thoughts, feelings, and beliefs. What are their deepest, most secret desires? Give them the opportunity to express their frustration, anger, and hatred. Putting their emotions into words helps the author get inside their skin and understand why they feel their behavior is justified.

Interview the villain/antagonist. Ask questions. What is their background? How did their parents treat them? Were they bullied or abused? What early losses or failures scarred them?

Another Jim Bell tip: have villains argue their case before the jury that will decide their fate. What compelling arguments can they offer to save themselves from the death penalty?

 

SCENE (Randy Ingermanson)

You also say every scene in a book is a miniature story. Explain that.

Every scene in your book needs to work as a short story. Every single scene. It must have a viewpoint character that the reader can root for (or root against). And it must have a single conflict that gets resolved by the end of the scene.

If you have even one scene that doesn’t work as a story, you’re going to lose readers at that scene. They’ll put the book down. And they’re done with that book.

So you need every scene in your novel to be pulling its weight. If a scene doesn’t work, then you have some options. You can kill the scene—just shoot it right in the head and throw its carcass to the wolves. Or you can fix the scene—figure out why it’s broken and solve the problem.

I have killed a few scenes in my life, but 95% of all scenes can be fixed. If you know how. And my book shows you how. One of the main reasons I wrote my book is to teach authors how to diagnose and fix a busted scene. (And also how to recognize a scene that works so you can leave it alone.)

 

EMOTION (Angela Ackerman and Becca Puglisi)

What part does emotion play in novel writing?

In some ways, emotion is the novel, because the words we choose will steer readers toward what we want them to feel. Is the noise emanating from that dark room a sing-song hum, a melody whispered to a child at bedtime? Or is it a slow, heavy scrape, conjuring the image of a monstrous axe blade being dragged across the floor? As the writer, we choose what we intend readers to feel, and shape our description accordingly. When we do this well, reading becomes an immersive, powerful experience.

To ensure readers are drawn in, though, we must make sure they emotionally connect to our characters first and foremost. We do this by revealing their human layers as they navigate the world around them, showing how they feel, what they need, want, fear, and think. When we do this well, readers connect to our characters because life is an emotional journey, and they find common ground. When we show what’s going on within a character, readers come to see them as someone real. They begin to empathize and become invested in what happens next.

 

DIALOGUE (Larry Leech II)

How does dialogue bring characters to life?

Individuality. Much has been taught about plot, structure, character arc, etc., but I believe readers love to hear a character speak. First, each character must have a distinctive voice. A fifty-year-old white male should not sound like a twenty-two-year-old female person of color. Even two teenage boys should not sound the same. Each has a backstory and moral center that dictates how they speak.

Think of the cinematic voices we know well. Whenever someone says, “Life is a like a box of chocolates,” we hear Forrest Gump. Or “No, I am your father,” we hear Darth Vader. Or “You’re gonna need a bigger boat,” we hear Chief Brody in Jaws.

Also, along with what I mentioned above about the importance of dialogue in story, dialogue also reveals worldview, syntax, and what I call “industry language.” For example, law enforcement and military personnel often say, “I’ve got your six (your back).” A plumber wouldn’t say that.

Along with action, dialogue helps the reader understand the character. And if done effectively, allows the reader to “live” the story instead of reading it.

 

DEEP POINT OF VIEW (Terry Odell)

Now, on to Deep POV:

Deep POV can be thought of as writing a first person book in third person. You are deep inside the POV character’s head, providing the reader with not only the character’s five senses, but also their thoughts and feelings. Because you’re deep into their heads, your readers should feel closer to the characters than if you have an outside narrator, as is the case in shallower third person POV. A test. You should be able to replace he, she, or the character’s name with “I.”

When writing in Deep POV, it’s also important to be true to the character. What would they notice? Two characters walk into a room. (No, that’s not the start of a joke.) One’s a cop; the other is an interior designer. They’ll focus on very different things.

 

ANTI-HEROES (Sue Coletta)

How do you define an anti-hero?

An anti-hero is the protagonist of the story, who straddles the law. Good people doing bad things for the right reason. Nothing is black and white. Anti-heroes thrive in shades in gray.

 

ROMANCE IN CHRISTIAN FICTION (DiAnn Mills)

Toss aside your thoughts about simple themes and tepid emotions that water down the love relationship between a man and a woman, Instead, think about how to include “real” elements and write an authentic and believable story.

  • The joy of true romantic love is real.
  • The emotions are real.
  • The physical, mental, and spiritual challenges are real.
  • The heartbreak of broken relationships is real.
  • The struggle of adhering to God’s way of honoring each other until marriage is real.
  • The blessings of obedience and a Christ-filled relationship are real.

Dipping our toes into the waters of writing Christian romance doesn’t mean we swim in shark-infested waters. According to the American Heritage Dictionary romance is “a feeling of excitement and mystery associated with love.” Love is “an intense feeling of deep affection.”

 

DESCRIPTION (P.J. Parrish)

How would you define descriptive writing?

Wow. That’s a toughie. Well, let’s start with a distinction. There’s explanation and then there’s description. Explanation is you, the writer, just dealing with the prosaic stuff of moving characters around in time and space. Explanation example: The man walked into the room. Simple choregraphy. Gets the job done but pushes no emotional buttons.

But description? That’s where the magic happens. When you work your descriptive powers, you engage the reader’s senses and imagination, maybe tugging on their memories and experiences. The man didn’t just walk into the room.  Rewrite:

The old man stopped just inside the door of the café. He was in his eighties, that much was clear. But as he stood there, erect and with a small smile tipping his lips, heads turned to him. It wasn’t just the panama hat or the seersucker suit. Because the hat was yellowed and his sleeves were frayed. No, we were staring at him because the air around him seemed to vibrate with an aliveness. He caught my eye and started toward me, and my throat closed. It was like looking at my father, the one I had seen only in photographs.

See the difference? The main purpose of descriptive writing is to show the reader a person, place or thing in such a way that a picture is formed in their mind. It means paying close attention to the details by using all of your five senses. Explanation vs description. When you explain something, you try to make it clearer and easier to understand. But when you describe, you’re tugging on their emotions.

 

FAITH IN FICTION (Chautona Havig)

For authors who are interested in including some faith element in their works, what advice would you give them?

I think the key is to reframe the idea of “putting faith into a book.” Instead, look at ways faith might naturally emerge from a character or situation.  That makes all the difference. Jesus talked about insides and outsides of cups. Polishing up the cup of your book to reflect Jesus doesn’t have the power that allowing Him to spill out onto the page naturally does.

The best way I know to make that happen is to fill yourself with Jesus. You can’t write what isn’t in you. Get into the Word. Study it. Talk about it with other Christians. Listen to godly teachers and then go compare what they said with what the Bible says.  I firmly believe that if you fill yourself with Scripture, it’ll come out in your writing and in your reading. You’ll get spiritual lessons from books that the authors never intended.  I know this because I can’t count how many times I’ve told an author, “When I read this and remembered that Scripture, I realized that this other thing was true.” MANY times the author says, “I never caught that connection.”  I got it because of what I was studying at the time. And God used that.  And that is the beauty of Scripture.

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A NOTE FROM KAY

I’m deeply grateful to all the authors who agreed to be interviewed on my blog in 2024 and to all the folks who dropped by to read and/or comment on the interviews. Best wishes to you all for a Merry Christmas and a safe and healthy New Year!

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THE CRAFT OF WRITING — JUNE 2024

This year the CRAFT OF WRITING blog is focusing on Aspects of the Novel. So far, we’ve covered Voice with James Scott Bell, Plotting with DiAnn Mills, Antagonists with Debbie Burke, Scenes with Randy Ingermanson, and Emotion with Angela Ackerman and Becca Puglisi. If you missed any of these, you can go to kaydibianca.com/blog and choose the post you want to read.

This month, I’m delighted to welcome first-time guest Larry J. Leech II to the blog. Larry is editor-in-chief of Bold Vision Books and a writing coach to multiple award-winning authors. With more than forty years of writing and editing to his credit, Larry is the perfect professional to talk to us about Dialogue.

So get out your manuscript and get ready to polish that conversation.

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Welcome to the Craft of Writing blog, Larry, and thank you for joining us!

Thank you, Kay, for the opportunity. I’m honored and grateful to share with your readers.

 

Why is the use of dialogue so important in a novel?

We discover as much, if not more, about a character, through their dialogue. We learn about their level of intelligence, their fears, likes and dislikes, goals, and attitude—in both spoken and internal dialogue.

 

Is there any “rule of thumb” as to what percentage of a novel should be dialogue? (I’ve read different opinions on this one.)

I believe the story needs to dictate how much dialogue. While we, editors and coaches, like to see a nice balance of prose and dialogue in a novel, putting a percentage or word count on the amount of the dialogue suffocates the creativity. Some characters are chatty. Others can be tightlipped. So, let the characters decide how much dialogue there should be.

 

How does dialogue bring characters to life?

Individuality. Much has been taught about plot, structure, character arc, etc., but I believe readers love to hear a character speak. First, each character must have a distinctive voice. A fifty-year-old white male should not sound like a twenty-two-year-old female person of color. Even two teenage boys should not sound the same. Each has a backstory and moral center that dictates how they speak.

Think of the cinematic voices we know well. Whenever someone says, “Life is a like a box of chocolates,” we hear Forrest Gump. Or “No, I am your father,” we hear Darth Vader. Or “You’re gonna need a bigger boat,” we hear Chief Brody in Jaws.

Also, along with what I mentioned above about the importance of dialogue in story, dialogue also reveals worldview, syntax, and what I call “industry language.” For example, law enforcement and military personnel often say, “I’ve got your six (your back).” A plumber wouldn’t say that.

Along with action, dialogue helps the reader understand the character. And if done effectively, allows the reader to “live” the story instead of reading it.

 

We’ve all heard the unusual ways authors sometimes substitute words for “said.” (e.g., roared, interjected, whispered.) How important is it to stay away from those?

Readers tend to skip over tags, which are simply a placeholder for those who have spoken. I teach my clients that “said” is preferred (even for the word ‘asked’ with some publishers), but action is preferred over said. People move while they talk. But in many early drafts, I see a lack of action while the characters talk. The characters either feel like they are floating around in space because of lack of setting or if they are anchored in a scene, they sit on their hands and talk with each other.

 

What are some of the other pitfalls writers fall into when writing dialogue?

Great question. The number one pitfall I see is tone after dialogue. If the tone is after the dialogue, the reader doesn’t read with the intended tone. For example: “I hate you,” she said angrily. But by putting the tone before the dialogue, we read with the intended tone. But tone can be substituted with action. For example: She slammed her fist on the table. “I hate you.” Or She giggled. “I hate you.” In each example, we know “she” is mad and being playful.

Second, I often see is the dialogue doesn’t fit the character. A sixty-year-old writing YA usually doesn’t have the language and mindset correct for the characters. The same can be said when someone writes outside their ethnicity or culture. Even if the author has done a lot of research, I encourage them to find someone in that age group, ethnicity, or culture to read for accuracy in the dialogue.

Third, direct address in two-person dialogue is not needed. It’s a waste of words. Remember, projects are based on word count, not page count. An acquisition editor or agent will ask, “How many words is your manuscript?” They don’t ask “How many pages?” So, don’t waste words on unnecessary direct address in dialogue. But, and often there is an exception, direct address between a parent and child can be acceptable.

Fourth, I didn’t think I would spend so much time on this question, most new writers like to include greetings for answering the door or a phone call. Again, wasted words and bogs down the reader. The example I use of how to avoid comes from a Richard Castle novel. Unfortunately, I can’t remember which one. In this scene, the characters Jameson Rook and Nikki Heat meet Rooks’s mother’s at a restaurant. Instead of writing out all the greetings, the author wrote: After hugs and hellos, … In an instant, we see and hear the greetings between the three characters without reading the words.

 

What is a good way to handle internal dialogue? 

Because most publishers I work with don’t want internal dialogue in italics or inside quote marks, action before internal dialogue will set up the internal dialogue. For example, I gave her a sideways glance and smirked. “I hate her.” Obviously, the speaker is talking about someone else, and that looks like spoken dialogue. Without the quote marks, we know it’s internal dialogue.

 

How should a writer approach using dialect?

Some say writing in dialect is like walking a tightrope. The author can turn away readers with too much or oversimplify, which will ruin the impact of the dialect. First, research is important—using the internet, reading books with that dialect, or, if possible, interviewing people who speak in the intended dialect. Second, use sparingly. Don’t overwhelm the reader. Third, as with all dialogue, the dialect should serve the story and, of course, the character.

 

What tips can you give us for writing great dialogue?

Avoid long sentences of explanation. Short sentences and fragments can be a writer’s best friend. Dialogue should be short, snappy, and have tension. Long: “Well, what color dress do you think would be appropriate for a first date with a man I just met online and know little to nothing about?” Short: “Would a blue dress be appropriate? I don’t really know him. We met online. It’s our first date.”

Also, large chunks of dialogue often feel like an info dump. I’ve seen manuscripts with dialogue that tops 150 words. While I don’t like a restriction on word count, that much dialogue will fill up most of a printed page and create a gray blob on the page. To fix that problem, to make the dialogue feel more organic, first make sure every bit of information is needed. Then break it apart with interaction with another character and with action as well.

 

Where can we find out more about you and your work?

Readers can find me on Facebook, Instagram, and my website, which is in the process of being redesigned.

 

Thank you, Larry, for being with us today.

Thank you again, Kay. I’ve enjoyed the opportunity to share.

 

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Meet Larry J. Leech II

Editor-in-Chief at Bold Vision Books and writing coach of award-winning authors, Larry J. Leech II has spent more than forty years writing and editing. He started his career as a sportswriter in southwestern Pennsylvania where he covered prep, college, and pro sports, including the Pittsburgh Pirates and Steelers.

 

In 2004, after 2,300 published articles, Larry moved into the book publishing industry. Since that time, he has ghostwritten 31 books, edited more than 450 manuscripts, and coached hundreds of authors through the writing and publication process. You can find him online on Facebook, Instagram, and his website.

 

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